"I left my wife
and 49 kids
on the verge of starvation
without any gingerbread left
left, left, right left."
Remember that one?
Thanks to my recurring reluctance to repeat a word in a poem, unless it's really intentional in a them kind of way, I am today trying to find another word for "left" (in the wife and gingerbread sense).
Preferably also monosyllabic. "Abandoned" feels a little too long and too strong.
I have several hours left.
Random thoughts on writing poetry and life in general
About me
- Joannie Stangeland
- Joannie Kervran Stangeland writes poetry and the Poe-query blog. Her new book, Into the Rumored Spring, was published by Ravenna Press. Joannie's also the author of two chapbooks--A Steady Longing for Flight (winner of the Floating Bridge Press Chapbook Award) and Weathered Steps (Rose Alley Press). Her poems have also appeared in The Midwest Quarterly, Valparaiso Poetry Review, and other publications.
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- Irons in the fire, or burners on the stove
- Trip to Portland
- Enough with the sad, sad, sad endings, already
- Insert story here
- Left, left
- The work of writing
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Poetry on the sofa
A Writer's Guide to Microsoft Office
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- Create a manuscript (part 1)
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- The Alchemist's Kitchen: Susan Rich's blog
- Floating Bridge Press
- Mutating the signature: Dana Guthrie Martin's blog
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- Judith Skillman's site
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- Open Books: A Poem Emporium
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- The Virtual World: Peter Pereira's blog
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- Shelburne Arts Co-op
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2 comments:
"...but I love my country
so whoop-de-doo (quick-change step here)
left, left..."
Sorry, I just couldn't resist. I know I used to chant this while walking in step alongside childhood friends, and my daughter will recall if I taught it to her.
As far as monosyllabic words to use for "left", it would be good to know more about the context. There's always "junked, quit, dropped" which don't seem very poetic. Good luck!
I love the whoop-de-doo!
I ended up (so far) with "packed away," as in
Stacks of crates and cartons packed away/years ago
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